In writing we were learning to...
Write a recount about what I done in
the holidays.
In the holiday my Mum had twins. They were born on the 19th of July. They are very cute, there names are Bison and Adeiy. Every Day and night Mum has to go to the Hospital and feed the Baby’s. On Saturday I played a rugby league game. I play for a team called panther’s. my team is on the top of the leader board. My Aunt came to watch my league game, when there was only three minutes left.
What I need to work on. I think I need to put some more punctuation in my work.
10/10 I love writing.
I've been writing more and using more full stops and putting the full stops in the right place.
I think my favourite part of this post is that you gave writing a 10/10! That is so cool. I can not wait to meet your new family members! Did you win the game? And if so, how many trys did you get?
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DeleteHi Bryce it's me Hunter, I like that you have put your commas in the right place. I agree your next step is to put some more punctuation in your stories. What was the score?
ReplyDeleteI don't know what the score.
DeleteI don't know what the score.
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